Comments on: Friday Snippet: The Widow’s Granddaughter (2)

By: IanT

IanT — Sat, 10 Nov 2007 14:38:40 +0000

He clearly needs to have his feet knocked out from under him…

By: Gabriele

Gabriele — Sat, 10 Nov 2007 02:25:44 +0000

Joely, I’ve heard things like that from perfect strangers. My reaction was a bit different from Marietta’s, though.

By: Joely

Joely — Sat, 10 Nov 2007 01:27:00 +0000

Gah, I can’t believe he just came right out and said that to a perfect stranger! Interesting, though.

By: cherylp

cherylp — Sat, 10 Nov 2007 01:03:27 +0000

I’d be more likely to take him on in a battle of wits instead of sleep with the guy, but I haven’t seen the rest of the story yet. She could be setting him up for a major fall, of course. Jeffrey is crude and rude–just the kind of guy you’d like to see the grandmother and granddaughter get the better of. Good job.

By: Shiloh Walker

Shiloh Walker — Sat, 10 Nov 2007 00:12:18 +0000

Yeah, I think the dialogue is a bit rough, but I’m thinking that has more to do with the characters and the situation. The guy was thrown a serious curve ball, both by the grandmother and the granddaughter. Certain situations will make all of us abrupt… this one would probably do it for me.

By: Zoe

Zoe — Fri, 09 Nov 2007 22:26:27 +0000

Definitely intriguing! The conversation does seem a bit… abrupt… for people who just met, but that could just be because of who your characters are. They both seem like interesting people so far, although of course we haven’t gotten to see much of Marietta yet.