Comments on: A Friday Snippet on Thursday

By: Ann

Ann — Mon, 14 Apr 2008 00:16:49 +0000

Very engaging descriptions. Nice way to set the scene. And a good build up of tensions going on.

By: J. Timothy King

J. Timothy King — Sun, 13 Apr 2008 05:08:53 +0000

Thanks for the comments and kind words, everyone.

Yeah, Mira is in a tough spot. No matter what she does, things are going to get much worse for her before they get better.

-TimK

By: cherylp

cherylp — Sun, 13 Apr 2008 03:05:40 +0000

What I liked about this piece was the specificity of everything–exactly what they ate and drank, exactly what Mira thinks and feels about her surroundings and what’s happening to her. It puts you right in the scene, and engages your senses so that the scene feels real. Good job.

By: Joely

Joely — Sun, 13 Apr 2008 02:55:54 +0000

Never had escargots but I liked your description. Nice tension and emotion back and forth and I’m totally wondering what Ike did to call himself trouble.

By: Gabriele

Gabriele — Sat, 12 Apr 2008 20:21:05 +0000

I hope Mira grows up and stops listening to Clyde instead of her own feelings.

Oh, and if the escargots tatsted like gummy, the cook did them wrong.

By: Bethanie

Bethanie — Sat, 12 Apr 2008 12:59:32 +0000

I like this! Nice build-up of tension and I love the description of Ike “weeping, deep inside his chest” (I know exactly how that feels).